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Some say that urban living has many benefits compared to rural living. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some people tend to wish to live in cities and some prefer the rural kind of living.
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 essay aims to discuss the benefits
as well as
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 drawbacks of
this
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 thesis. Urban
life
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 has developed throughout the years from the original rural living. Having its roots in a simple and natural
way
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 of getting on with
life
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 times, we have the possibility to choose between these two, but what do we need to consider in order to make the best choice for us? It is
an
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 subjective choice and it depends on the person who makes it.
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,
a
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rural living comes with benefits, especially if you want to reconnect to
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still
life
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,
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 as returning to the roots, just by redirecting your attention to nature and
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way
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 of taking its time to metamorphose.
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 to rural living, urban
life
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 is louder and excessively designed with elements that stimulate your mind. Too much of that may have negative effects on our
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 of living. The city kind of people
tend
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 to be more stressed and anxious than the traditional ones. It is because
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 urban
life
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developes
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develops
developed
 at a speed, we could never develop as fast and that raises our levels of cortisol and we distance ourselves from the natural
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. Urban
life
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it's
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 benefits especially in profession developing
,
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 because to
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 extent, a mass of humans
are
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 creating and fighting to survive and to pay taxes,
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 occurs to making businesses and
other
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others
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 more . Contrasting
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 idea with the idea of
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life
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 like a journey, not like a fight.
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