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Some say that urban living has many benefits compared to rural living. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some people tend to wish to live in cities and some prefer the rural kind of living.
This
 essay aims to discuss the benefits
as well as
 drawbacks of
this
 thesis. Urban
life
 has developed throughout the years from the original rural living. Having its roots in a simple and natural
way
 of getting on with
life
.
This
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 times, we have the possibility to choose between these two, but what do we need to consider in order to make the best choice for us? It is
an
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 subjective choice and it depends on the person who makes it.
Therefore
,
a
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rural living comes with benefits, especially if you want to reconnect to
a
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still
life
,
such
 as returning to the roots, just by redirecting your attention to nature and
it's
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its
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way
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a way
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 of taking its time to metamorphose.
In contrast
 to rural living, urban
life
 is louder and excessively designed with elements that stimulate your mind. Too much of that may have negative effects on our
way
 of living. The city kind of people
tend
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 to be more stressed and anxious than the traditional ones. It is because
,
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 urban
life
developes
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develops
developed
 at a speed, we could never develop as fast and that raises our levels of cortisol and we distance ourselves from the natural
way
. Urban
life
 has
it's
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 benefits especially in profession developing
,
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 because to
this
 extent, a mass of humans
are
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 creating and fighting to survive and to pay taxes,
this
 occurs to making businesses and
other
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others
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 more . Contrasting
this
 idea with the idea of
life
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 like a journey, not like a fight.
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