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Some people think it is letter to travel by cars in the city. Other, however think traveling by bicycles is better. Discuss both views.

#people #travel #cars #city #bicycles
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this
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 modern era, travelling from one place to
another places
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another place
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 is more important as
compare
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compared
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 to
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the acient
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acient
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ancient
time
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times
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 when people only prefer small vehicles to cover
large
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a large
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 or short
distance
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distances
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.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 everyone
see
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sees
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a varity
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varity
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variety
 of
vehicels
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vehicles
 in
the
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society every
individuals
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individual
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 have their own
choices
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choice
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 in terms of mode of transportation. In the upcoming
pragraphs
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paragraphs
i
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I
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 will shed
lights
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light
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 on the travel by car is good or by
bicycle
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. First and foremost, in
the
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ancient
time
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,time
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 people
use
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 to travel from one place to another because there are many benefits if
inviduals
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individuals
use
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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.
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,
bicycle
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 control air pollution and noise pollution in the environment as
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 to
the
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cars
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 which generate toxic gases and cause bad
effect
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effects
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to
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on
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 the respiratory system.
Moreover
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, if someone
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use
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uses
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 it makes the body strong. To
examplfy
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exemplify
example
, if someone went to the market on
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 the individual
have
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has
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 to put energy to move the
bicycle
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 which
exclude
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excludes
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 the
toxic
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toxicity
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 in the form of sweating and
which
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makes the body strong and healthy.
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, in
this
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 fast
faced
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paced
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 world everyone is busy
in
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apply
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making their life comfortable and wants
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle so people prefer
luxery
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luxury
cars
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 no doubt there are many advantages of using
cars
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 over bicycles as
the
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a
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 mode of transportation.
Firstly
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,
cars
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saves
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save
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 a lot of time in
the
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traffic and
one
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they
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eaisy
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easy
easily
 covers
thousands
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ofthousands
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 kilometres as
compare
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compared
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 to bicycles.
Secondly
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, if we
use
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cars
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 it
become
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becomes
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less
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fewer
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 chances of accidents or
enguries
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injuries
enquiries
. In the nutshell, both
the
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bicycles and
cars
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 have benefits but
from
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in
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 my opinion travelling by
bicycle
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 is good for health and society.
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