The chart above shows the number of man and woman in further education in Britain in three periods and weather they were studying full-time or part time.

The chart above shows the number of man and woman in further education in Britain in three periods and weather they were studying full-time or part time.
This
bar chart depicts the number of male and female
students
in Britain who are pursuing their high education in three two-year periods comparing the full-time and part-time commitment for each interval. A glance at the graphs provided reveals the student, as an aggregate, increased throughout the span.
According to
what is shown, part-time male
students
were at the one million mark in the first period (1970/71)
while
full-time
students
were only a tenth of
this
figure. After getting a dip of about 130
thousand
, the not fully committed
students
recovered by 60
thousand
reaching 930
thousand
. The full-time dedication by man learners kept rising till it hit the 240,000 mark in the
last
decade. Regarding female learners, part-time
students
rocketed substantially by 200,000 after it climbed slightly in 1980-1981 by the quarter of the
last
increment.
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study got more popular at the beginning of the period by 100
thousand
increase which climbed very modestly later.
To sum up
, we could say that females numbered males in the count of
students
in 1990 contrary to what was three decades back.
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