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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on six consumer goods in 4 countries. Explain in details

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on six consumer goods in 4 countries. Explain in details
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The bar chart provides information on how 4 countries spent on six main expenditures. X-axis gives data on the amount of money spent in
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sterling pounds (thousands)
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 shows six different items. Both Britain and France mostly spent on photographic films which are 170,00 sterling pounds
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 in Italy and Germany, the highest expense was on toys.The amount spent on perfumes and tennis racquets was the same and was responsible for the largest cost in Germany which was 150,000 sterling pounds. Britain's spending on all six consumer goods was either the highest or equal compared to the other 3 countries.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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