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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my concern regarding the difficulty that I am facing with my roommate. I am living in Room No 121 and using shared accommodation. The student with whom I am living is fond of
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music and creating
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a distraction
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distraction
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 I have requested him multiple times to lower
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the volume of songs, he is not paying attention towards my query. He is using the
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 music and it is creating
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 impact on my studies. As I have seen an exam schedule, my final exams are starting
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next week. I am able to prepare myself for
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 upcoming challenge as it requires a lot of focus. I have
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 tried to study in our
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 garden but there is too much noise. I would request you to provide me
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separate room
along with
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 my classmate so that we can
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combine
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studies
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 as well. If you can allot us a room away from the noisy park
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 it will be more beneficial. I will be highly thankful for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Khizar Shahid

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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