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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs
provides
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 key
informations
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information
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 about
the
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police finance from 2017 to 2018 in a particular area of Britain. The table displays where the
money
 came from and the chart displays how the
money
spent
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.
Overall
, the source of
money
 from the national government was the highest, followed by
local
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the local
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 tax. The source
rom
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from
 the other sources was the lowest over the period of time given.
Moreover
, the
money
 spent
for
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on
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 salaries was the highest,
while
 spending
in
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the
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technology was the lowest in every recorded time period. In 2017, the source of
money
 from
national
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the national
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 government stood at 175.5m and it reached a peak of 177.8m
in
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the next year.
Moreover
, the local taxes increase sharply from 91.2m and rise sharply to 102.3m,
while
 the other sources rise
steadly
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steadily
 from 38m to 38.5m. In 2017 the proportion of
money
 spent
in
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on
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 salaries stood at 75% and fell to 69%,
while
 building and transport experienced
an
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a
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 sharp increase from 8% to 14% in 2018. Spending
money
in
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on
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 technology remains stable between 2017 and 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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