The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern era, everyone has
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awareness
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sports. Participating in games with a team will help to improve the
cooperate
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skills
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the children. I completely agree with
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statement. In
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will explain
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the reasons and examples.
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reason behind it is that, apart from
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team sports not only
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cooperation but
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learn socialization.
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, in
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modern era ,
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generation
do
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not have time to mingle with others and share their problems.
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,
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communication skills are reduced. and
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moreover
, team games assist how to cooperate
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with eachother
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eachother
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each other
when
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problem occurs.
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cricket
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word cup
world cup
kapildev
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Kapil dev
got injured
then
the captain immediately replace him with another batsman for the match and won the match.
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, everyone
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support
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him to win.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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