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Major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this the case? What are some possible solutions to this?

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It is true that nowadays, an overwhelming majority of individuals are suffering from turning significant parts of countries into enormous provinces which are over-occupied
due to
 a variety of reasons.
Besides
, in order to tackle
this
 problem, there are some solutions. Today, the phenomenon of changing important centres into huge areas consisting of too many people has been caused by lots of factors.
Firstly
, important places
such
 as countries' capitals have the most cutting-edge products and instruments in almost every aspect of living; from the industry of medicine containing multidiscipline hospitals to sports in terms of having extraordinary clubs with high-tech devices. 
Secondly
,  despite human beings' nationalities, they much more likely tend to live and settle in so-called metropolitan, experiencing a wide range of cultures and traditions. 
For example
,
according to
 the UN, in India, because of being the land of thousands of cults and religions, visitors and travellers prefer to stay considerably longer in the
last
 years of their lives. 
Finally
, the most important factor behind
this
 issue lays down in well economic status of giant metropolises, which facilitates living and makes strangers not only stay longer but
also
 get married and expand their family members. Plus, after addressing the problem with a great degree of accuracy, authorities should take some recommendations into account. 
To begin
 with, the key factor is in the hand of improvement of small cities' infrastructures
such
 as constructing great medical centres, establishing well-organized gyms and sports stadiums and developing the public's levels of wealth. 
Moreover
, if the population of tiny provinces are fulfilled with these productive basements and beneficial facilities, they will neither think about living in major downtowns nor have to. 
Therefore
, by adopting the policy in which less populated states could take advantage of social services as equally as people living in big cities,
this
 detrimental trend would be stopped. In conclusion, because of having powerful support in major states, people are immigrating to them, which could be easily ceased by strengthening the small cities' infrastructures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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