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Most people these days prefer getting news online to reading newspapers or watching TV. Do you think it is a positive development?

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Nowadays,it is widely recognised that the majority of people have been reading newspapers and watching
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 for the latest
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 plenty of residents are thought
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that way.In the forthcoming paragraphs and
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 shall provide both benefits and drawbacks
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 statement. To commence with,there are a myriad of citizens
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 prepared to get
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 from various sources
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 as newspapers and
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Moreover
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,it is so convenient for
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human beings to know
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information across the globe.
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, we could get data within a moment by watching
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European civilians have gotten all kinds of
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 from social media
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 Television,which assists them to update every day.Even though, the younger generation
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 so much fascinated by
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 in those nations,mainly they are interested in
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educational and sports
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.It is used for learning to study things for them and that would help to more knowledgeable person in the society.If they attend any school or college quiz competition,they will perform very well compared with other peers.Eventually,
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 children to elder people
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are getting more informative
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 from Youtube,Facebook and Instagram.Because,there are spending about 4 to 6 hours
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online,compared with outside.So,they could easily receive
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 from online websites.
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,there are only a few detrimental things from
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 and online newspapers.What is more,they are likely to allocate a ton of time on those sites,which causes
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health
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 as obesity and eyesight.
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Australia residents are spending a huge amount of time
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online,but they could not focus on daily life things
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 as spending time with family members.
To sum up
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,Technology plays a vital role in everyone's life and a number of people are interested to get
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 on
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 and online.
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,they could get a huge amount of valuable information and
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 it is used to enhance their abilities and knowledge.
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