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In most countries prisons are popular actions against people who do crime. However, educating people against crimes can be more effective solution. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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 ages, countries have been sentencing their lawbreaker to Jails. Many individuals think that counselling is more result-oriented than sending them to jail. I strongly agree with
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 I will give examples to support my opinion. First of all, Prisons are not considered the perfect place for rehab. Take
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 example of petty offenders,
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 living with murderers and rapists, they will start learning criminal paths from them.
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, these minor lawbreakers will turn into dangerous earthlings.
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, when government agencies start spreading awareness among
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 citizens regarding the consequences of being the culprit, people will start hating crimes.
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, if the public is been told how hateful it is
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 robber or a serial killer or how it's
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 living far from their loved ones, they will think many times about doing criminal activities. Having said that,
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 an undeniable fact that some sinners realise their mistakes
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 remaining behind the bars but their percentage is very less as compared to the ones who got frustrated by the isolation and become
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serious
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 to the societies.
To sum up
, Sending villains behind lockers is widely practised among many nations. In my point of
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 it is more beneficial to instruct civilians to refrain from hateful acts rather than turning minor lawbreakers into gangsters.
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