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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages?”

#museums #charge #admission #people #admissions
Nowadays certain amounts of
museums
 tend to require payment for entrance.As I
itsee
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see
,
such
 a system is devastating for humanity's enlightenment
whereas
museums
 are being under the threat of no demand for visitors. The first aspect to point out is that any cultural centre which is obliging its clients to pay is harming itself as
Initially
,the vast majority of
such
 organisations were free.Undoubtedly,each organization requires distinct funds to be maintained.Hopefully,
museums
 are not included in the list of private institutions but vice versa being sponsored by the government.Concerning the entrance fee,
museums
 are likely to lose their guests because of their notorious reputation as people have been already habituated not paying for it.
Moreover
,
such
museums
 are threatened by
further
 closure.
For Instance
,in 2011,one of the Ferganian
museums
 was suffering from a deficiency of clients.The reason was the building company bought the space where the museum was located and made it act as a private one.,Eventually it had been closed off because of a non-profit situation. In the case of following the trend,not only materialistic but
also
 mental factors will be affected.By not having proper access to
museums
,residents are likely to partly lose interest in their motherland's history what situation has its specific,detrimental repercussions.
For example
,Uzbek scholars actively participated in multiple tours to
museums
 but the tendency was closed off. The reason was the high prices of tickets when not all pupils could afford a journey to and
then
museums
' popularity as well started to decline.Eventually,children were left with no opportunity to see the physical evidence of history and cultural centres disadvantaged respectively. In conclusion,If it had not been for
such
 alterings,humanity would be able to enlighten in a more effective way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Preservation
  • Exclusionary
  • Revenue
  • Artifact
  • Maintenance
  • Engagement
  • Admission fee
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Sustainable funding
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