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The graph below gives information about internet users in three countries between 1999 and 2009

The graph below gives information about internet users in three countries between 1999 and 2009
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of internet users between 1999 and 2009. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that
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 the beginning the proportion
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 users in the
USA
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 was the highest, followed by
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Canada
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.
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Mexico
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 was the lowest user in every recorded time period. In the end,
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Canada
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 got a maximum,
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 the
USA
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.
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,
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Mexico
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 was still the lowest. In 1999,
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 started at around 30%
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 experienced a gradual increase.
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,
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Canada
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 stood at around 10%,
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 witnessed
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dramatic growth and reached a peak of roughly 100% in 2009.
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Mexico
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 started from the lowest point
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 5% and rise sharply
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 40% over the period time given. In 2003,
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Canada
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 reached the maximum
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 60% followed by the
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around
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at around
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 48%.
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Mexico
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 reached a minimum point
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 about 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, canada, mexico with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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