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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In modern times the issue of teaching
children
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 how to be good members of
society
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 became highly controversial.
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 a common opinion is that
children
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 should be taught by
parents
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 how to be good members of the
community
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, others feel that the best place to learn it is
school
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. I agree with the latter point of view Generally, speaking the main reason why people are in favour of
parents
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 should educate
children
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 for becoming an asset to the
community
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 is because a child is closer to his or her
parents
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 compare to their
school
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 teacher which gives
parents
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 an advantage to make their
children
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 a good member of the
society
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. The
further
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 point in favour of
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 idea is that
parents
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 can teach their
children
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 through their actions.
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, if
parents
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 follow the rules and regulations of the
community
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 they are living in, their offspring will follow the same.
On the other hand
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,
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 many individuals educational institutes like schools can give insight into
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 and how to be an active member of it because teachers have training for teaching a child which many
parents
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 do not have.
As a result
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, they can teach
children
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 about social norms easily and influence become a good member of
society
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.
Moreover
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,
children
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 can be taught through group work in
school
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 how to be productive members of the
community
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according to
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 many people.
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: there are many schools in the UK that teach
children
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 how to be good people in
society
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 by providing them with different group work. In conclusion, from the above discussion,
it is clear that
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 both sides' arguments are strong. My personal view is that
school
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 can make a child a better person in the
community
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,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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