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In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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The pervading of new lifestyles and ways of thought comes from the new generation of mankind’s race seems to change the way of living for
couples
 and families.
This
 is committed by the differences and gaps between generations around the world, leading to some arguments about the pros and cons of the problem they should adults continue to stay in the same house with their
parents
. Given mankind’s relentlessness,
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 and alternatives in lifestyles seem to be a natural progression. Living with
parents
 in the past might be unfamiliar to nowadays
couples
, but
this
 could yield several benefits.
First,
living with
parents
 gives them more time to spend and care for them.
As a consequence
,
this
 would bring more memories for both generations
while
 spending time living with each other.
For instance
, some situations that the
elder
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 could not cope with by themself might lead to unexpected danger like a heart attack.
Moreover
, the elderly could
also
 look after toddlers when
couples
 are not free.
This
 could yield memories for the kid and bring the family closer to each member. An extended family is obviously more fun and less quiet than a nuclear one. On the opposite view, living with
parents
 is still not a good choice for many people because of privacy and economic problems. Young
couples
 tend to be living alone more than living with their
parents
. They might prefer the atmosphere of the house to be more romantic than normal air. In some situations,
parents
 might not have a good eye for the husband or the wife, they tend to tease and mock the couple for choosing the wrong person
instead
 of the one they wanted their children to choose. And sometimes, the majority of the
elder
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 are not always in a good mood, they are old and often get tired. Helping them in their routine life because their having a cold or disease could bring
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them many troubles and problems. For those who did not have a soulmate, some tend to rely on their
parents
' finance even though they are adults are
also
 a demerit of
this
 topic. In conclusion, the advantages might overshadow the disadvantages in some fields but people still have to make the right decision about whether to live with their
parents
 or not.
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task response
Your essay demonstrates a basic understanding of the topic, but there is room for improvement in addressing all aspects of the prompt. Make sure to provide a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages.
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Your essay shows a good organization and use of cohesive devices. However, consider using more transition words to better connect your ideas and improve the flow of your arguments.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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