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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the global sales of the top five mobile phone brands, namely Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG, and ZTE between 2009 and 2013. The main feature that stands out from the picture is the number of units sold up to 450
million
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 (in USD) during that period, and the least quantity of units sold recorded
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 20
million
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.
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, the biggest trade
recorded
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 by Samsung in 2013, followed by Nokia in 2009, with
total
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of
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gross revenue amounting to 450
million
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,
then
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 the revenue of Nokia dropped dramatically in 2013 to 250
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. In contrary
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Apple has the fewest amount of profitable in 2009 which makes up 20
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, but the number rise significantly which accounts for 90
million
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, and 150
million
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 respectively in 2011 and 2013.
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, ZTE brand mobile phone has a steady movement from 2009 until 2013 with an average sales of 40
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.
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, the sales of LG Mobile Phones decrease slightly from 120
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 to 70
million
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 during the period.

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