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It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a difference of opinions regarding the accessibility of tertiary education to the majority of young
people
. In my view, dispensing
university
 educational services on
such
 a large scale brings about no practical
values
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 to society, and
also
, it is rather unfeasible to carry out
this
 policy.
First,
widespread entry into
university
 does not seem really useful to a country since the government need to take the needs of both the youth and the economy into consideration. In many countries, especially Germany, vocational training has gained more popularity among young
people
 because it enhances employment opportunities
as well as
 job security upon completion.
Furthermore
, if everyone could gain admittance to college, it would lead to imbalances in
workforce
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 that would greatly damage
economic
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 structure. It is because there is little chance that
university
 graduates would choose blue-collar jobs
such
 as working in factories.
Second,
I think that it is impossible to provide almost all young
people
 with access to tertiary education. In Vietnam, the demand for entering college never ceases to grow at a rapid rate.
This
 puts the government in a dilemma of whether they should risk allocating their resources and
therefore
 face the possibility of bankruptcy
due to
 exorbitant education costs in many financially dependent universities, like Foreign Trade
University
 or National Economics
University
. On top of that, it is simply unrealistic for universities to accommodate
such
 a suddenly increased number of students on campus,
not to mention
 the fact that most departments are currently short-staffed. In conclusion, I strongly oppose the idea of supplying entry to a high proportion of young
people
 owing to the presented arguments above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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