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Nowadays information freely available on internet,therefore is no longer needed for museums. Do you agree or disagree

#information #internet #museums
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For centuries,
museums
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 are the source of cultural and historical representation of tribes or countries.
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, some people believe the same
information
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 is available on the web and
therefore
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museums
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 are not much needed nowadays. I completely disagree with
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 idea and I will support my opinion with examples.
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,
museums
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 provide more comprehensive knowledge about anything. Those have very rich details about these things and provide more insights about their life journey.
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, It is very easy to understand human evolution if it is taught at the very beginning and with examples.
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,
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 are considered to be the best place to learn about these things.
Secondly
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,
history
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museums
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 contain countries or tribes' ups and downs. they provide how they have navigated different situations and how they keep continuing their progress.
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, the Kite museum in Ahmedabad provides a rich
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 and its relation with the city from the beginning.
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, the
history
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 of nations or peoples can be preserved for coming generations.
Thirdly
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,
history
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museums
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 contain all the
information
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 about the topic they represent.
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 to that, They do not have any other topics.
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, science
museums
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 represent everything about only science.
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, it is very easy for people to focus on one thing at a time. Admittedly, All pieces of
information
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 which
museums
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 hold are now available on the internet. These pieces of
information
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 can be accessed from the comfort of home without going outside and staying in queues for hours to watch in
museums
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.
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, it will save you time and money which would require you to visit a museum physically. In Conclusion,
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 it is a common belief that
museums
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 are no longer required as all the knowledge is now available at your fingertips. I believe
museums
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 should not be closed as it represents the
history
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 and values of nations and should be visited to get authenticated and true
information
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.
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