Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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There are many arguments that social media negatively influences a person and their circle in their lives.
On the contrary
, some people believe that has a positive impact on them.
This
essay will discuss both these views, and I will give my personal opinion about how internet community sites have many advantages for our work. The first argument is the beneficial use of those tools to get job opportunities. In
this
era, remote working is the trend, and we can work anywhere and anytime. Through
this
, we can get information about vacancies and connect with employers.
Moreover
, we will discuss our assignment and progress via it.
Second,
this
internet platform allows us to interact with our college, which is far away from us. If we work or study abroad, we can connect with our beloved via these tools. Many platforms,
for instance
, Facebook and Instagram, give video calls if we want to call someone and view their face.
In addition
, it
also
helps us promote our product or service widely.
For example
, Instagram has a unique feature, which is a shop feature that can link our product in the feed to the shop.
On the other hand
, there are many scams through it. Parents must control their children when they use It. Improper content for kids is widely spread through
this
network, which includes pornography, violence, bullying, and many more. It must be filtered for the future life of them. It
also
has many hoax information. The government should eradicate it because it has a negative impact on the society. They can become enemies just because of fake news. In conclusion, I believe the positive aspects of social networking sites have more impact than negative ones for us. We must maximize its benefits and filter the bad things to improve our quality of life.
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Task Response
To improve the TASK ACHIEVEMENT, ensure that you address all parts of the task. The essay should provide a balanced discussion of both the positive and negative impacts of social networking sites, including pertinent examples. Your personal opinion should be clear and well supported by arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
For COHERENCE AND COHESION, work on organizing your essay in clear paragraphs with topic sentences that announce the main idea. Ideas should flow logically from one paragraph to the next, and the use of cohesive devices such as linking words should be accurate and help rather than confuse the reader.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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