A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in a computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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this

20th century,

technonolgy

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technology

the

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part of our daily life and

computer

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is the main revolutionary invention.In my opinion

computers

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advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Technology

makes our life easy and comfortable though

crime

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and

war

ratio increase enormously. To

began

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with,

technology

makes our

life style

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lifestyle

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far better compared to previous

dacades

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decades

.To be precise,with the

discover

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computers

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individuals do every possible

things

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,which

aid

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us to create a brighter future.To illustrate

this

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this computer

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computers

has

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all sorts of function peoples

has

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to command the

computers

and they do their work within minutes ,

whereas

folk have to spend years for a

soluation

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solution

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this

,we upgraded our communication and transportation system ,which

allow

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us to do

unimmaginable

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unimaginable

things

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,now we can go to space to find new

habitate

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habits

for our future.NASA sent a spaceship to Mars to find out the environment of

this

planet.

On the other hand

technology

brings some unnecessary

things

to us like

war

,pollution and crime.

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, since 1950 the industrial revolution

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thus

increasing the emission of carbon dioxide .

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we suffer from various environmental issues.

Moreover

war

is another problem,which is a great concern for all countries.When a

war

is start thousands of innocent people die without any reason.

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,in the 2nd world

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millions of people died and America was attacked by

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weapon

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,which is a great invention of science,more than 5o thousand Japanese people died. In conclusion,

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technology

always brings good

things

and develops our lifestyle,

although

some inventions create noise

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we can mitigate these

things

by proper use of our invention

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Topic Vocabulary:

dependent on technology
digital platforms
instant communication
automation
advanced software solutions
access to information
educational resources
screen time
health issues
eye strain
sedentary lifestyle
privacy concerns
cybersecurity threats
identity theft
data breaches
overreliance
face-to-face social interactions
social skills
isolation

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A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in a computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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