A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in a computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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20th century,
technonolgy
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technology
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part of our daily life and
computer
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is the main revolutionary invention.In my opinion
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computers
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advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Technology
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makes our life easy and comfortable though
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the crime
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and
war
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ratio increase enormously. To
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with,
technology
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makes our
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far better compared to previous
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.To be precise,with the
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of
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computers
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individuals do every possible
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things
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,which
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us to create a brighter future.To illustrate
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this
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this computer
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computers
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all sorts of function peoples
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to command the
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and they do their work within minutes ,
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folk have to spend years for a
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solution
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,we upgraded our communication and transportation system ,which
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us to do
unimmaginable
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unimaginable
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.
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,now we can go to space to find new
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habits
for our future.NASA sent a spaceship to Mars to find out the environment of
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planet.
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,
technology
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brings some unnecessary
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to us like
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,pollution and crime.
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, since 1950 the industrial revolution
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increasing the emission of carbon dioxide .
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we suffer from various environmental issues.
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,
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is another problem,which is a great concern for all countries.When a
war
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is start thousands of innocent people die without any reason.
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millions of people died and America was attacked by
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weapon
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,which is a great invention of science,more than 5o thousand Japanese people died. In conclusion,
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technology
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always brings good
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and develops our lifestyle,
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some inventions create noise
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but
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we can mitigate these
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by proper use of our invention
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependent on technology
  • digital platforms
  • instant communication
  • automation
  • advanced software solutions
  • access to information
  • educational resources
  • screen time
  • health issues
  • eye strain
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • privacy concerns
  • cybersecurity threats
  • identity theft
  • data breaches
  • overreliance
  • face-to-face social interactions
  • social skills
  • isolation
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