The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
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The given bar chart gives information about which means of transportation young kids used to common to and from
school
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in two different years: 1990 and 2010.
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, we can see that the majority of children preferred to walk to
school
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in 1990,
whereas
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driving youths to their
school
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building was more common in 2000. In 1990, more than 12
million
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trips were made by food, which was
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the highest figure on the graph. After twenty years,
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number
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dramatically declined to only 6
million
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. As for travelling by car, there were nearly 4
million
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trips in 1990 compared to 11
million
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in 2010. Looking at the
number
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of journeys made by bicycle, we can see that
while
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in 1990 there were just over 6
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,
at the end
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of the period given
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number
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plumbed drastically to only 2. Children who went to
school
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by walking and taking the buses followed the same pattern, going from just under 6 to 3
million
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trips between the two years.
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, those who took the bus in 1990 were slightly more than in 2000. with a
number
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of 7 and 5 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, million, number with synonyms.
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