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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause?  What can be done to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years an alarming trend has taken place, always more highly skilled working figure,
such
 as doctors and teachers, are fleeing their own developing or underdeveloped countries in pursuit of
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workplace
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 in first world countries.
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 causes several problems within the former ones that find themselves with inefficiencies within public services
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. Available solutions might comprehend
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 on benefits for these working categories other than assuring more perks and incentives. In
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 place, a reducing trend in healthcare and teaching personnel leads to
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 higher ratio between professionals and beneficiaries. A legion of problems
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 from
this
 issue.
Firstly
, overcrowding of public services leads to inefficiencies in these fields.
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, inefficiencies
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 more people in need not
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obtain proper treatments rather than
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 education, allowing only wealthy people to have access to adequate services.
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, solving
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 intervention which through a tailored fiscal policy ought to bring more incentives for these categories
such
 as free insurance during working hours rather than appealing retirement plans. As witnessed in Uganda with the 2006 public policy plan, proper actions and funding are able to
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 not only
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 the
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 could foster more people in pursuing these careers in their own countries
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, problems like these need to be tackled
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by public policies which may guarantee stability and long-sight prospects for particularly needed professional figures.
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