Success is often measured in wealth and material belongings. Does wealth measure success? What makes a successful person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Throughout the entire human history individuals’

success

within societies has been measured by tangible criteria. Mostly because it is easier. Indeed, the easiest way to assess one's

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value is to measure their wealth.

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, many people would list as relevant other aspects to

weight

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someone else

success

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as career (working achievement) and network capacity as well. So, should we reframe

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common belief or it is the right way as it has always been? To start with, the more you own the more it means that you have found your path in

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life,

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you made it.

In addition

, as long as you are becoming richer you will always be increasingly regarded as a distinctive person.

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, it does not matter in which way, legal or not, crushing other's feelings and personal esteem, stealing or scheming.

Above all

at the end

of the day, what really

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is how much you're able to show off.

On the other hand

, most people see

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working achievements

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success

measure. Striking an important deal for your firm, winning an important cause in court or

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making

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life changing

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discovery are all indicators of

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success

However

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kind of

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take

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into account a different side of it, namely, working hard in order to reach the top and be the best at what you are doing.

To sum up

, public opinion will put you constantly on the exam chair to evaluate what you have achieved up to date.

Although

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people

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the people

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feel good

to run

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this

hamster wheel one should ask himself whether to

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pursue

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success

to appease and please others or for their own personal satisfaction.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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