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Success is often measured in wealth and material belongings. Does wealth measure success? What makes a successful person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Throughout the entire human history individuals’
success
 within societies has been measured by tangible criteria. Mostly because it is easier. Indeed, the easiest way to assess one's
so called
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 value is to measure their wealth.
However
, many people would list as relevant other aspects to
weight
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 someone else
success
.
Such
 as career (working achievement) and network capacity as well. So, should we reframe
this
 common belief or it is the right way as it has always been? To start with, the more you own the more it means that you have found your path in
this
 life,
that
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 you made it.
In addition
, as long as you are becoming richer you will always be increasingly regarded as a distinctive person.
Thus
, it does not matter in which way, legal or not, crushing other's feelings and personal esteem, stealing or scheming.
Above all
,
at the end
 of the day, what really
matter
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 is how much you're able to show off.
On the other hand
, most people see
in
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working achievements
a
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as a
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success
 measure. Striking an important deal for your firm, winning an important cause in court or
the
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making
of
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a
life changing
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 discovery are all indicators of
one
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success
.
However
,
this
 kind of
events
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take
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 into account a different side of it, namely, working hard in order to reach the top and be the best at what you are doing.
To sum up
, public opinion will put you constantly on the exam chair to evaluate what you have achieved up to date.
Although
 most
of
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people
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the people
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 feel good
to run
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 in
this
 hamster wheel one should ask himself whether to
purse
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pursue
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success
 to appease and please others or for their own personal satisfaction.
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