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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays more and more people think volunteering should be a necessary part of high
school
 courses ,
such
 as : working for a charity , improving the neughbourhoood or teaching sports to young children. I agree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, unpaid community for teenagers can lead to poor progress in studying. Firtsly, in overwhelming majority of schools it is very difficult for an average
student
 to study on good marks , because he will pass exams , which needs very hard training. So, volunteer labour will distract a
student
 , he will not have enough time for
school
.
Furthermore
, those students, whose age is 15-18 years are almost children .Because of that, they can have stress , which
also
 affects on students progress in
school
.
On the other hand
, volunteering is a good way for a
student
 to
experience
 adult life. Usually, an average
student
 after 11 years in
school
 and 4-5 years in university has huge amount of knowledge , but he has not got any
experience
 , which is very important thing in resume.
For example
 , when an employer see two similar resumes , where in one has working
experience
 , and the other has not , the employer will choose the first one.
In particular
,
this
 applies to IT sphere. In conclusion , volunteering is a thing that received a majority of successful buisnessmen and general managers
such
 as: Steve Jobs , Elon Mask , Tim Cook and others. I think that all disadvantages of unpaid communities is compensated by the
experience
 that
student
 can get there.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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