Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays more and more people think volunteering should be a necessary part of high

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courses ,

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as : working for a charity , improving the neughbourhoood or teaching sports to young children. I agree with

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statement. On the one hand, unpaid community for teenagers can lead to poor progress in studying. Firtsly, in overwhelming majority of schools it is very difficult for an average

student

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to study on good marks , because he will pass exams , which needs very hard training. So, volunteer labour will distract a

student

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, he will not have enough time for

school

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, those students, whose age is 15-18 years are almost children .Because of that, they can have stress , which

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affects on students progress in

school

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, volunteering is a good way for a

student

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experience

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adult life. Usually, an average

student

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after 11 years in

school

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and 4-5 years in university has huge amount of knowledge , but he has not got any

experience

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, which is very important thing in resume.

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, when an employer see two similar resumes , where in one has working

experience

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, and the other has not , the employer will choose the first one.

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applies to IT sphere. In conclusion , volunteering is a thing that received a majority of successful buisnessmen and general managers

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as: Steve Jobs , Elon Mask , Tim Cook and others. I think that all disadvantages of unpaid communities is compensated by the

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that

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can get there.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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264 words

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high school programmes
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improving the neighbourhood
teaching sports
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