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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #water #consumption #two #countries #summarise #features #comparisons
The line Graph provides data about
liquid
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the liquid
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of
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water
, which are in use in the world from 1900 to 2000, with
table
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a table
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 indicating
water
 consumption in Brazil and Congo in 2000.
Overall
, the main information
present
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presented
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 Graph , where data about Global uses of
water
 has been divided
for
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into
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 three sectors
such
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as
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Agriculture , Industrial and Domestic uses
during
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over
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 several years. Another part of information can be found in
table
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the table
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 ,where
indicate
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indication
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 about uses was given in
details
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detail
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 about two countries.
To begin
 with, generally Agricultural remained the most consuming industry during
a whole periods
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whole periods
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. It took about 500
km
 of
water
 in 1900 and
this
 line increased dramatically to around 3000
km
 till 2000 years.
Interesting
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The interesting
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 factor is that from 1900
to
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different types of
using
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use
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was
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were
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 under 100
km
 till 1960. But the
percent
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percentage
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 for Industrial
uses
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use
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 climbed sharply from
this
 period to 2000. Domestic use experienced slowly climbing and levelled under
the
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apply
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400
km
 in 2000. Regarding
to
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apply
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the countries, Brazil had
bigger
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a bigger
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 population
as
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176
millions
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million
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 and
it is clear that
 the
uses
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use
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 of
water
was
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were
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 much more than in
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of Congo. An irrigated land
Brazil
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in Brazil
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 reached 26500
km
 and 359 m of
water
 per person. The inhabitants of Congo
was
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were
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 less than 53 million and 8m of
water
was
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per person.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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