The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I agree with the former opinion that
sports
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positively have the strongest character for education cooperation in
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and it is based
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there are multiple things which
students
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need to think about in each scene
while
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playing
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.
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, in volleyball, players are demanded to predict where the ball is flying to
while
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thinking about the strategy of the
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and checking where the other players including teammates are at the same time.
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, the situation is changing every second. To get more practical experience and situations, it is
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that
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can go through deeper and more complex
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skills by playing
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,
therefore
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,
sports
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are the best
way
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for getting the ability to associate within the
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.
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,
thousand
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of types of
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are played around the world and the variety of them are countless, it can be part of
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for them of playing
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type of
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.
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,
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do not work for every student, the unkilled
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can not have risen their association
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this
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way
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, compared with killed
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in
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,
Basket ball
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Basketball
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is one of the famous team
sports
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around the world. It is common in the education platform and it is often played in classes. For the
students
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who like to play
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basketball
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,
this
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is
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valuable
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to learn
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on the other
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hand
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the
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who do not play well
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as scaring balls,
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are afraid
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of physical
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and inexperience which are
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the typical
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negative
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of basketball even more
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. They have been losing their opportunities,
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, the experience of failure like incorporation with
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teammates
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let them believe that they have poor social skills. The
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do not cover
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the
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all
students
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,
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sports
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have
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prominent
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of teaching how to build themselves in
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the group
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even though
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lacking of
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to
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the
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who do
no
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not
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prefere
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prefer
sports
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.
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,
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are the most practical
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of teaching cooperation to
students
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • values
  • applied
  • aspects
  • belonging
  • camaraderie
  • participating
  • essential
  • social skills
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