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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.

The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.
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The information regarding the contrast how much time
spend
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by three different businesses to make a fridge has been illustrated by a line graph in 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be inferred that
company
 C produces the least refrigerator the other two,
while
company
 A shows high production of the fridge. At a first glance, it can be clearly seen that
company
 A produces refrigerators above 40,000 in 2000 and 2001.
After
this
, it frequently goes down to less than 30,000 in 2002.
Next,
it produces around 20,000 in 2005.
Then
,
company
 B make less than 20,000 fridges in 2000. Gradually it increases in 2002 and reached 25,000
then
, again decreases in 2003. Moving
further
,
company
 C manufacture only 2000 fridges in 2000.
Then
,
its
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it
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 declined to 1000 in 2001.
Then
, it escalate to 2000 in 2003. Later, it go down to 500 in 2004. In 2005 it produces just 400 refrigerators.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes down" was used 2 times.
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