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Art is considered an important part of society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on arts rather than other subjects?

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Art
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 is gaining more
acknowledgment
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 these days compared to the past. Indeed,
art
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 plays important role in society and is expressed in the form of several activities and creations. Some people argue that
children
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 should be taught about
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. I completely agree with
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.
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,
Children
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 should not be encouraged to
focus
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 only on
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 rather than other subjects, as
children
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 should be given the freedom to choose any
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that is
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 appealing to them. As with any other
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 or knowledge,
children
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 have to be introduced to many kinds of arts including paintings, traditional dance, traditional handcrafts, batik, and so on. some of these can be taught at school.
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, there is an
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subject
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 in almost elementary schools in Indonesia, where students learn to paint, make souvenirs from local wood, or practice Indonesian traditional dances. by learning these
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 expressions the youth may appreciate their culture more.
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, it is
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 important for young people to understand other subjects
such
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 as science, maths, Language, and physical exercise and not merely
focus
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 on
art
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. I personally believe that
children
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 should be supported to
focus
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 more on a
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 that they choose and they are good at. Some of them may choose
art
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 as their major; because they have a talent and passion for
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. In conclusion, it is important that
children
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 be introduced to
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, but whether they want to
focus
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 more on
art
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 is depend on their passion and talent.
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