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Many people use social media on a regular basis in order to keep in touch ‎with the news and with other people. Do you think that the advantages of ‎this development outweigh the disadvantages?‎

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One of the most conspicuous trends in today's world is social
media
. There is a widespread worry that
this
 only leads to a myriad of concerns in society. In my opinion,
this
 apprehension is warranted and merits serious consideration.I totally agree with everyone who thinks that using technology is an advantage in
this
 age.
Firstly
, there are several arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant is that it is possible to see many views or many sources of news. To elaborate
further
, all the journalists are on Facebook or Instagram and you can read more than one opinion about the war in Russia.
According to
 "Magazine December 2022 Edition" if social
media
 appears in greater volume, it will only upgrade society but
also
 benefit our environment.
Nevertheless
, all these merits stand our community in good stead as far as social
media
 are concerned.
Additionally
, another overt facet of social
media
 is keeping in touch with old
friends
.
Furthermore
, online is it possible to find an old friend from school or old love, it is easier to keep in touch with a message on Facebook than go out.
For example
, my grandmother uses every day facebook, she use to chat with a lot of old
friends
 from college and university.
To conclude
, social
media
 are a fantastic place where spend time reading articles or chatting with
friends
, the important thing is not to spend all your life with the phone in your hand or your face in front of the computer but use the time to go out and spend good time with
friends
 and family.
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