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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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In many parts of the world, with the development of the economy,
the
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 number of enterprises is established.
This
 leads to environmental pollution all over the world. Some residents argue that governments should apply high
taxes
 for industries to limit their effect on the earth;
however
, others think that authorities should choose alternative solutions to deal with the problem. I think that politicians should give good solutions
instead
 of rising
taxes
. No one can deny the fact that
companies
 that play a prominent role in the economy of each country create job opportunities for citizens. Operating activities of various industries can cause harm to the environment. If authorities rose
taxes
 on protecting the environment, CEOs would invest in research about improving waste treatment systems. An example of
this
 is that in Ho Chi Minh City, after applying high
taxes
 on saving the Earth, a bunch of
companies
 spend money to develop the process of rubbish.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are many better options
instead
 of increasing
taxes
. Governments should publish
companies
 causing the loss of biodiversity on newspapers and social media platforms and award to frim that have a good environmental track record. Looked at from a broad marketing perspective, Cocoon, a new cosmetic company in Vietnam, is an example. By protecting and preserving natural habitats, the brand has received a lot of support from young customers.
As a result
, sales on traditional and online platforms increase significantly. In conclusion,
instead
 of increasing
taxes
, governments should have taken all reasonable efforts to minimize the damage
such
 as awarding
companies
 with eco-friendly actions.
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The evironment
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Evironment
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Environment
 is life, pollution is death.
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