Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The
technologies
to monitor people's behaviours have been dramatically developed. Use synonyms
This
trend causes a new problem of people's privacy. Linking Words
This
essay will discuss the pros and cons of those Linking Words
technologies
and consider whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages or not.
First of all, in most cases, these inventions are introduced as measures to prevent criminals from taking illegal actions Use synonyms
such
as murders and sales of illegal drugs. Actually, the more security cameras have been set up in our city, the less number of Linking Words
crimes
will happen. To prevent Use synonyms
such
incidents from occurring which harm citizens, we need a sense of being watched by someone. On Linking Words
this
point, those Linking Words
technologies
have played an important role.
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However
, when it comes to an issue of our privacy, there is a risk that others will abuse the records for wrong purposes Linking Words
such
as stalking. Linking Words
Thus
, what we need to consider is how we can eliminate the possibility that someone can abuse the information stored in the database. When we compare the positive impact of these Linking Words
technologies
on our society to the negative effects, I think that the advantages will outweigh the shortcomings in the sense that they have played an extremely important part in preventing Use synonyms
crimes
from happening.
In conclusion, new Use synonyms
technologies
to record what people are saying and doing are quite useful to make our society more secure. Use synonyms
However
, at the same time, there is Linking Words
also
a problem that they are used for Linking Words
crimes
that they are trying to take away. Use synonyms
Therefore
, it is ironically necessary for us to consider the ways to stop Linking Words
crimes
taking use of them.Use synonyms
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