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The use of social media is replacing face to face intraction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days most
people
 are more on using social
media
 ,unlike real interaction in the middle of society. In my opinion, those drawbacks of our society are not a good start and numerous young age are learning something bad about social
media
 and absorbing it into their daily lives.
Firstly
, there are many negative effects of not giving more time when it comes to intercourse with other human beings
for instance
 more
people
 became dependent on social
media
, they can't learn from other
people
 how to cope or solve the problem. Especially young
people
 just adopt what they see on social
media
 and feel it's right because they've seen other
people
 do it.
In addition
,
this
 is the contrary effect of living in a new generation. In another way, users of social
media
 some parts
such
 as giving the easiest way how to negotiate with other
people
 when it comes to business, one way to market their products by not using other
people
 to become endorsers, purchasing the item online and being capable to answer enquiry as much as they can. Those processes to our economy having more consumers to support our handiwork.
To conclude
, expending time on social
media
 is not totally okay in the matter of communication with your loved ones and buying necessary needs, but you must have control when using it. The most important thing is don't forget to socialize with other
people
however
 learn from their experienced and be more productive by not using social
media
 all day.
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