the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances
The line graphs illustrate data about
hte
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the
percentage of households (
washin
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washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigirator
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refrigerator
,
vacum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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)
spend
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on
this
per week, over a 99-year
period
between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that amount of time per week became lower
at the
end
of the
period
. Another interesting finding is that
refrigirator
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refrigerators
showed a significant increase over a
period
. As regards the details, people spending time
started
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starting
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at 50 hours per week in 1920 and
then
it slightly decreased by
aproximately
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approximately
15 hours in 1980. Having
leveled
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levelled
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off until 2000, the
figure
then
fell slowly
at the
end
of the
period
.
By contrast
, in terms of
refrigirator
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refrigerator
, there was a sharp incline from 1920
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until
1960 the figures as 0% and
then
it
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they
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became 90%. After that, it was a slight increase, after which the
figure
remaind
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remained
remains
stable at 100%in 1980 and until 2000.
However
,
a
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the
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washing machine showed a
flactuation
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fluctuation
, it went up slightly,
at
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to
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40% compared to 70% from 1920 until 1960, the
figure
then
went down gradually to
arround
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around
65%. After falling it slowly increased
at the
end
of the
period
. Regarding
vacum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, the
electic
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electric
eclectic
appliance went up gradually over
a
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an
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80-year
period
,
started
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starting
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at 30% and
end
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ending
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up at 100% the
figure
then
leveled
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levelled
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of
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off
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at a peak
until
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in
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2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, end, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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