Across the world, local shops are closing due to losing customers to online competitors. What problems does this produce? And what solutions can you suggest to overcome them?

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give
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information about
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habit in buying and drinking
coffee
and
tea
based on
survey
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in Australian city include
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
, and
Hobart
. The result is
mostly
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people in all cities went to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
in
last
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the last
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4
weeks
than bought fresh
coffee
or instant
coffee
. The highest percentage of
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variable
bought fresh
coffee
in
last
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4
weeks
is
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in
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Sydney
and
Melbourne
with almost 45%. The second place is
Hobart
with 38%, and it is not too different for
Brisbane
and
Adelaide
with 34%. Meanwhile for the second
varible
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variable
(bought instant
coffee
in
last
4
weeks
) number of percentage in
Brisbane
and
Hobart
is
skyrocated
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skyrocketed
up to 50%, and for the
others
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cities including
Sydney
,
Melbourne
, and
Adelaide
in
range
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45
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%
until
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to
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50%. The
last
variable
is went
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to
cafe
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a cafe
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for
coffee
or
tea
in
last
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the last
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4
weeks
met the top result
especially
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in
Melbourne
and
Hobart
with 64%, the second place was
Sydney
with 62%, the two
last
places
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place
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is
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in
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Brisbane
and
Adelaide
with 56% and 49%. The
conclution
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conclusion
is
individual's
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habit
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habits
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mostly went to
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a cafe
the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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for drinking
coffee
or
tea
, especially in
Melbourne
and
Hobart
. But, there are some people who bought instant
coffee
and fresh
coffee
too like in
Sydney
.
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