The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates data about the number of people who participated in seven
the
most significant kind of sports in the years 1997 and 2017.
Change preposition
of the
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that gentle walking was by far the most popular hobby throughout the Linking Words
period
. Use synonyms
However
, basketball showed the least common sport at the beginning of the Linking Words
period
, Use synonyms
while
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chricket
came bottom of the chart Correct your spelling
cricket
chicken
at the end
of the Linking Words
period
.
As regards the details, the number of adults who took part in cricket in 1997 was considerably higher than in 2017, the figure dropped three times Use synonyms
during
20 years. In terms of gym usage, it had been equally popular over Change preposition
over
this
time. Regarding jogging, individuals were slightly more interested in Linking Words
this
in 2017 rather than Linking Words
1997
, at nearly 36 Change preposition
in 1997
thousand
as opposed to 33 Use synonyms
thousand
.
Use synonyms
By contrast
, if we look at Linking Words
year
2017, there were few fields in which Change the article
the year
sport
competitions outnumbered others. Fix the agreement mistake
sports
For instance
, twice as many people participated in basketball games in 2017 as in 1997. Linking Words
In addition
, Linking Words
football
and hiking trend was nearly the same, Correct article usage
the football
it
started Correct pronoun usage
they
about
34 Change preposition
at about
thousand
and went up Use synonyms
almost
50 Change preposition
to almost
thousand
. Use synonyms
Finally
, the data Linking Words
of
gentle walking illustrated a slight increase of 5 Change preposition
for
thousand
over the Use synonyms
period
.Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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