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Some people believe online reading material should only be used for a cild to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays
mor
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more
most
people
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 have one or two
cars
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. Fortunately, developing countries improve
standard
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their standard
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 of living
due to
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this
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people
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 can buy expensive stuff
for
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to
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 satisfy the demand. On the one
hand
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,hand
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 there is a
benefit
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benefits
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 of
this
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 technology, but
on the other hand
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, there are some drawbacks and
issue
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issues
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 which must be discussed and
soled
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solved
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. In
this
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essay
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,essay
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 both sides will be explained and supported with examples. First of all, speaking about purchasing
cars
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 for the first
time
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 it is worth noting, that society
give
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 a
lot
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 of benefits.
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, they can stop wasting a
lot
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 of
time
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 on the way to work
due to
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this
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people
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 have free
time
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 which can spend on the family.
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Also
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,Also
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 society become
more smart
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smarter
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 because they have more free
time
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than then
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then
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they
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 don’t have
car
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a car
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.
However
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,
this
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 topic has disadvantages which can not be ignored.
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,
cost
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the cost
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on
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of
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the
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apply
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gasoline. Unfortunately, gasoline
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this
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apply
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is
important
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an important
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 resource for society. It depends on economics, so
this
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 product has
higher
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a higher
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 price.
Also
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, it is worth noting
problem
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a problem
the problem
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 with details
cars
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. Every six months
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cars
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car
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 should be checked
on
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for
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 technical drawbacks. Usually, after
inspections
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,inspections
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people
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 give a
lot
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 of money
for
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to
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 repair
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the car
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car
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cars
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. So some
persons
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people
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 sell
cars
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 because they do not have enough money.
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, I want to say, that
cars
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this
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 is good
investing
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investment
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 for
myself
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me
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. You save a
lot
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 of free
time
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 which can spend
for
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with
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 family. But
on the other hand
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,
this
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 is
big
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a big
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 problem. So,
cars
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this
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 is
expensive
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an expensive
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 product. I think, that before buying
car
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a car
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.
People
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 should think about
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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