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Band 6

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter * say why he/she would not enjoy going to college * explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her * suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Sam , I hope
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 letter finds you in excellent health and great spirits. I am writing
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 letter to give you a suggestion that you should try for a job
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 of college. These days , education become very expensive
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 it is not easy to get admission
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 any exorbitant college.
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, it will take almost 2 to 3 years to complete your studies and the burden of different courses will devastate you.
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 why , it is not a good idea to enrol in any education institutes. I believe, if you
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 be a great source of income and you can solve your financial problems
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 earning money at your workplace.
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 will help you to become independent at
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young age and with a lot of experience you will be able to open your own business. As you have tremendous knowledge of art and craft
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 would be the best option for you . I have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper who are hiring a knowledgeable person for DIY projects. I will send you the contact number of
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 company. I hope you will like my suggestions and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovely,

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use a clear structure by starting with a better introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Make sure you fully explain your points. For instance, discuss more about how getting a job can benefit your friend beyond financial independence.
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Consider using a more formal tone in your letter. Phrases like 'I believe' or 'I recommend' can sound more professional.
tone
Your letter has a friendly tone, which is nice for personal communication.
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You included specific suggestions for jobs, which is helpful.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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