The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
The given bar chart provides information about the proportion of spending money weakly in 8 different groups in 1968 and 2018
Overall
, housing, transport and leisure have experienced an upward trend,
whereas
food, fuel-power, clothing-footwear and personal goods have shown a downward trend.
While
the household goods group has not changed over the given time period. When we look at the graph in detail, housing spending increased almost two times which is 10%in 1968 and about 17% in 2018, respectively. Transport costs increased, and the payment reached approximately 15% weakly. Leisure cost was almost 10% in 1968, but in 2018, the payment increased to more than 20%. At
this
time, the household equipment fees did not change, which is about 7.5% weakly. When we look at the rest of the graph in detail, the food budget dropped sharply from 35% to more than 15% over time.
Then
, fuel-power and personal equipment budgets were about the same in 2018,
that is
less than 5% respectively.
Finally
, the clothing and footwear group dropped to half,
that is
5% in 2008.
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