The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
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The given bar chart provides information about the proportion of spending money weakly in 8 different groups in 1968 and 2018
Overall
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, housing, transport and leisure have experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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food, fuel-power, clothing-footwear and personal goods have shown a downward trend.
While
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the household goods group has not changed over the given time period. When we look at the graph in detail, housing spending increased almost two times which is 10%in 1968 and about 17% in 2018, respectively. Transport costs increased, and the payment reached approximately 15% weakly. Leisure cost was almost 10% in 1968, but in 2018, the payment increased to more than 20%. At
this
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time, the household equipment fees did not change, which is about 7.5% weakly. When we look at the rest of the graph in detail, the food budget dropped sharply from 35% to more than 15% over time.
Then
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, fuel-power and personal equipment budgets were about the same in 2018,
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less than 5% respectively.
Finally
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, the clothing and footwear group dropped to half,
that is
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5% in 2008.
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