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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In our modern
life
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the
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 number of individuals
believe
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 that humans started to rely
to
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on
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 each other,
while
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 other
people
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 claim that being independent is the main aspect of each person. From my point of view, the first way is the most common, as
people
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 are able to dwell happily by being in
community
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 where everyone is ready to help each other. Nowadays we are living in
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 world where everyone’s main aspect of their life is having
someone
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 who
always
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 with them. Because there would be
the
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 number of different situations when we have
someone
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 difficulties
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 out
from
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 them. Among
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this
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 viewpoint is turning into another side, which means being dependent on
someone
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 is
the
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 negative impact.
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 viewpoint can be recommended by
people
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, especially
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 had enough experience in the past and that kind of
people
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 always try to explain it to everybody.
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, what if there will be any difficult situations when helpless individuals are alone, they definitely will fall down if they were always helped by
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 else.
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, living
independent
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 can be
also
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 real pain for many
people
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 who sometimes do not happy with their
life
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 conditions, with problems which they might face and difficulties which always seem impossible to get out
.
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 Humans believe that
,
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 depending on each other is too beneficial, even though it
guaranties
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 the
the
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real value of lifestyle. There would be numerous factors when
people
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 sometimes rely on their clothes relatives or friends which makes them feel more comfortable and less stressed about their issues. Being dependent on another person is one of the main
theme
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 on social media too.
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, the biggest international news company BBC Inc. on January 22
2023
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, 2023,
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 year published their article about relying on each other. The main interesting part of their work
were
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 the words, “Be always ready to rely on each other if you feel that” which means they will able to make their own mood happy. In conclusion, we are living in
the
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 world where
people
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 think that
,
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 being independent is the most valuable asset,
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 others say vice versa, which means they should be ready to look after each other and I think the second way is admired by the number of individuals.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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