Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding , while others think it’s a waste of money. What is your opinion?

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Obviously, if most people have a chance to betterment their
arrangement
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and make happier their guests, sometimes they will spend money unconsciously. Some advocate that wasting money
for
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this
type of
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would be mainly needless behaviour. I partly agree with
this
statement. In
this
essay, I will illustrate the pros and cons of expenditures of large weddings based on my perspective and support examination as well.
To begin
with, people who work as CEO or are
high
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privileged
person
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people
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usually prefer to go
luxury
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places and arrange their
meentings
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meetings
in well-known restaurants. So, these attitudes actually depend on vanity.
Also
, big parties and weddings usually demonstrate
their
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owner how
wealthy
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. Because if they obtain huge and significant connections, they are obliged to invite all of them to their special days.
Moreover
, if you forget someone before making
invitation
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an invitation
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letter, you would
be
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lose your network with somebody. On the flip side, most people already prefer to arrange their parties and their special
days
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day's
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such
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as wedding
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wedding
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weddings
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,
also
a birth
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for only their relatives, close friends and
collegues
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colleagues
.
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, they have
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to choose little places
such
as
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the terrace
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terrace
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terraces
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,
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or backyard
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backyard
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backyards
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. some particular companies or agencies already can deal with
this
type of
arrangements
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arrangement
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.
As a result
of
this
action, they can save their capital.
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, they order menus and tables
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restaurants equally with their guests,
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that day some of them couldn't participate in
wedding
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the wedding
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. In conclusion, the latter
one
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would be true for me.
However
i
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would get a chance to be an important person in the future,
may be
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maybe
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i
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I
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will arrange
wedding
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a wedding
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party for all of my
acquintances
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acquaintances
.
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