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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays the states tend to contribute more money to road development rather than the rail industry.in my view ,
such
 a system would only harm humanity's lives and the government's budget respectively. The first aspect to point out is that investments in
roads
 are decreasing the chance of reconsidering the means of travel.
In other words
,by paying less attention to rail amelioration people will use vehicles more,what factor is partly devastating.Despite the environmental harm of cars,individuals put themselves under threat of accidents as not all areas are provided with appropriate
roads
.
For instance
,in Uzbekistan,distinct spaces in the countryside still have unsatisfactory quality routes.
Therefore
,
according to
 statistics,the annual indexes of road disasters are not dwindling but vice versa are dramatically increasing
due to
 the factor that cars are the most distributed kind of transportation.
Besides
 the aspects of human factors, governments across the globe are in danger of a financial crisis connected with the transport sphere exclusively.The major reason is the number of vehicles which are promised to double in near decades.
Hence
, more money will be required only for routes and highway construction.Concerning railways,
in contrast
 to
roads
,their manufacture and as well maintaining
do
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 not require enormous funds
whereas
roads
 are in need of regular repairs.
For example
,Tashkent
roads
 are frequently in demand of refreshments as the approach of their building
along with
 materials are not enough dependable. At the same time,maintaining the railways in
this
 country is quite a simple and non-expensive process.As proof,since the USSR time,rails are serving with no hints to be changed with fresher ones. In conclusion,If the power had paid more contributions for the rail field thriving,both mankind and the financial conditions would probably benefit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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