As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Globalization
is a phenomenon that has recently changed the societies and the way we live in todays
Change to a genitive case
today's
world
. It has been going on for centuries but with the improvements of technology and communication, it has grown rapidly in the last
couple of decades. In this
essay
I will examine Add a comma
essay,
argument
that Add an article
the argument
globalization
will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural indentity
. In the Correct your spelling
identity
last
part
I will provide my concluding remarks.
To start with, Add a comma
part,
globalization
has made a
Correct article usage
the
world
a smaller place to live where distances between countries and different timezones
are shorter than ever before. Correct your spelling
time zones
In addition
, people share same
values and ideas and it generates similar ideologies across the globe. It has partially contributed to a reduction of cultural identities as those small ideas are becoming a lot harder to protect and cherish. Correct article usage
the same
Additionally
, we could argue that the world
is globalazing
to Correct your spelling
globalising
extent
that everything is becoming dominated by the mass markets and societies. Some people argue, that social media as a way of communicating has resulted in Correct article usage
the extent
reduction
of real human Add an article
a reduction
the reduction
interraction
that enables us to pass knowledge to one another from older generations Correct your spelling
interaction
due to
knowledge
gap.
Correct article usage
the knowledge
Secondly
, in the below paragraph, I will be reviewing positives
of Correct article usage
the positives
globalization
and how it can help us prevent cultural indentities
. As previously mentioned, Correct your spelling
identities
with
the Change preposition
apply
world
becoming a smaller place due to
increasing means and speed of transportation, it
has resulted in people being able to explore more than ever before. Correct pronoun usage
which
For example
, nowadays it is a lot easier to travel from America to Asia than it was a hundred years ago because you do
no longer need to take weeks on a boat, Unnecessary verb
apply
instead
you can simply get on a plane and fly across. this
really enables us to see and learn more. There has been a recent study published on BBC news
, that Capitalize word
News
suggest
there is a tribe in New Zealand that would have been completely distinct if not for a post about it on social media that went viral and that has attracted many visitors all across the globe. Change the verb form
suggests
Moreover
, it is argued that even before this
rapid growth of industrialization over the last
few decades, features of cultures had challenges such
as wars, famines and invasions. It has been known to mankind that it is a natural process that enables us to strengthen these values and enable that
to grow even more.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
them
although
globalization
has resulted in world
becoming a smaller place to live where all the values are set by new and upcoming means of communication of mass media, there Add an article
the world
has
been Correct subject-verb agreement
have
a
significant positives of that as Correct article usage
apply
outline
above. Those new ways of reaching out to the unknown Wrong verb form
outlined
has
resulted in overcoming challenges that were difficult previously and enabled us to develop knowledge vital for protecting Change the verb form
have
those
identities of other and our own.Correct determiner usage
the
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