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The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040in three countries

The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040in three countries
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the population
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 of the three different nations
that
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 is 65 aged
peroson
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person
 in between 1940 to 2040. The data is calibrated into
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a percentage
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percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
, it is clear from the above graph that aged 65 people of
population
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the population
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 showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend in all countries. Commencing at 9%,which was the highest proportion
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USA
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the USA
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 in 1940, later, it
was gradually increase
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 from 1940 to 1980,about
of
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15%
than
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 there was
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 of 1%
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 2020. Afterwards,
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the fraction
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 will
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dramatically
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of
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 9%
in
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between 2021 to 2040.
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, the lowest percentage
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 in Japan, which stood at 5%, having a
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 downfall of 2%,upto1980. The ratio was slightly
rised
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raised
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 in upcoming years,
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up to
 2023
than
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then
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fraction
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the fraction
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 goes
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to its
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 peak value in 2040(27%). Probing
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, Sweden had
7
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a 7
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% proportion in
first
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 year than ratio was fluctuating incline
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 is 2040, goes its end value around
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25%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words upto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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