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“Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?”

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At present times,
technology
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 prevails in our everyday life and it has widespread effects on our life.
Technology
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 can be used in different sectors of our lives
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 as monitoring
people
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's activities.
Although
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 there are benefits and drawbacks regarding
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 issue, the benefits never outweigh the drawbacks.
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 with, there is no doubt that
technology
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 has brought some positivity
as well as
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 negativity in our lives.
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 as with the advancement of
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, we can just keep an eye on
people
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while
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 they are unaware of it.
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 it seems a bit embarrassing it has some useful purposes like safety issues. In urban areas
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 mostly in shopping malls, hospitals, public transport and any public gatherings,
people
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 are under the surveillance of CCTV which provides them maximum security and protection from harassment, sexual abuse, bullying and so on.
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, if any crime occurs
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 as robbery or theft, the criminals can easily be caught by the
technology
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 of phone tracking.
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, there are some sayings that monitoring
people
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's deeds is not a good practice because it breaches their privacy.
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, privacy and safety both are basic human rights. That's why when it comes to
people
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's safety issues they should not be ignored. More precisely, with the help of
technology
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 of monitoring
people
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, crimes occur. As
people
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 are unaware of the monitoring they sometimes get blackmailed by criminals.
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, when they are monitored unknowingly, with a copy of the video they get blackmailed.
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, in shopping malls or in the medical centre there are some CCTV which do that video nudity and
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 get blackmailed by criminals.
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,
technology
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 has both positivity and negativity and the fact is how effectively it can be utilized for the betterment of
people
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. Though the ever-increasing effects of
technology
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 contributed to monitoring
people
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, the purpose should be only ensuring the betterment of
people
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.

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