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The table below shows the total amount of road traffic in the London borough of Enfield for the years 2008 - 2015

The table below shows the total amount of road traffic in the London borough of Enfield for the years 2008 - 2015
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The table depicts the number of traffic in London which was categorized into seven types of
vehicles
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 and surveyed annually between 2008 and 2015.
Overall
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, all of the surveyed
vehicles
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 indicated upward trends,
whereas
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 only light
goods
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vehicles
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 and heavy
goods
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vehicles
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 had downward tendencies,
while
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 all
vehicles
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 remained unchanged. In detail, 618.673 cars were the highest amount in 2008. Unfortunately,
this
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 number had a decline in the following year.
However
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, in 2011, it increased dramatically to 644.208 even though
this
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 trend did not
last
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 long and began to fall in 2015 to 605.323. Pedal cycles, motorcycles, buses and coaches
also
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 experienced a similar pattern, which fluctuated significantly from the first year to the end of the period.
On the other hand
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, the amount of light
goods
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vehicles
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 rose gradually from 110.150 in 2008
then
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 experienced a dip to 87.397 in 2011. Afterwards,
this
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 number had a major shot up to 115.331 in the
last
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 year. Heavy
goods
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also
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 revealed a positive figure that moderately increased over time between 2008 and 2015.
Additionally
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, all
vehicles
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 remained stabilized.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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