You would like a temporary job working in the summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people next summer. Write a letter to the organizers of the summer camp. In your letter: explain what sort of job you would like to do describe your personality say what experience and skills you have

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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letter in response to the advertisement which published on your website
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week for an administrator of the summer camp. I am particularly interested in
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position. Your advertisement
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that you are looking for a person to help with
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the enrollment
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process and other office work
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such
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, such
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as booking
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places, flights and accommodations. I think I have the experience and qualifications to make
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job successful. I consider myself
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quite patient as I think being patient is a necessary personality
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trait to
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communicate with young individuals.
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, as I am an extroverted
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person,
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it is extremely easy for me to get along well with new people and friends, which helps me complete my daily tasks with minimal effort. I have been working as a secretary in our university association for around three years since starting my university, which
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me the value of responsibility, discipline and paying attention to details.
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, I joined a club which is aiming to help teenagers who
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struggling with their
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, so I have a great amount of experience dealing with adolescents. Thank you for considering my application. If you would like to talk about my application
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, I would be highly delighted to come to your office when you are free. Yours faithfully, May N

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task response
The letter clearly shows you want a camp admin job. Add a short line about the exact role you want at the camp and how you help kids there.
coherence and cohesion
To be clear, use one idea per paragraph. Use easy links like first, next, and also. This will make your talk fit well.
content
Clear aim to work at the camp.
tone
Polite and formal tone.
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