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Some people might benefited from communication technology , but some groups of people have not benefited at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Some
people
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 believe that modern communication
softwares
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software
 or apps are beneficial for some individuals,
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 they have drawbacks for others. Personally, I agree with
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 statement, it is because convenience is the primary advantage to those
people
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 who benefit from it,
however
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,
disturbance
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the disturbance
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 is the most serious problem which is caused by
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communication technology. On the one hand, some think that using conversation devices eliminates the boundaries between
people
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. In the past ,before the invention of the internet,
people
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 hardly talked to those
people
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 who lived in other countries, since it might have taken more than a month to convey their messages by mail.
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, nowadays,
people
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 can easily converse with others whenever they want.
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, there are many dating apps which provide users with the opportunities to talk to
people
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 not only who live in the same district but
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 to those who live in other countries.
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, the lack of boundaries could mean no limits. To be more specific, many
people
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 ‘s spare time may be interrupted because of social media.
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 is because
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 could be reached easily from
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 and anywhere.
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,
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 the popularity of social apps, many employees receive work messages continuously from their employers or colleagues even after leaving the office.
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, they are forced to work overtime because of these devices. In conclusion, the foremost benefit
for
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 communication technology is the convenience of talking to
people
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 without limits and location.
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this
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 convenience may be an issue
especially
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 for those
people
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 whose personal time is disturbed by the business messages during their relaxable time.
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