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Some people say that advertisement is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discus both views and give your opinion.

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In recent decades, the number of advertisements has significantly increased through social media or the Internet. Whether
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advertisement
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 is undoubtedly persuasive to attract
customers
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 or commercials are too prevalent to gather individuals' attention has been argued.
In my
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 opinion, I strongly agree with the former view since companies can grow profits
by
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through
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the ad
an ad
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ad
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ads
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
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 issue by using examples to support ideas and demonstrate points. On the one hand, it is a fact that an
advertisement
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 can send
an information
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information
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 which
customers
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 could require comparatively easily and conveniently through technological developments.
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, if individuals accept subscriptions
of
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to
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 an
advertisement
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, they can attain special offers or discounts
of
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on
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 groceries by
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apply
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email.
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, as
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 can buy products
of
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from
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 a company by clicking buttons on advertisements, companies in South Korea acquire significantly increased profits.
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, it is quite beneficial for businesses to persuade
customers
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 to buy
merchandises
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merchandise
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 worry that
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 too
much
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many
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 and frequent commercials,
people
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 tend to be less interested in checking advertisements.
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, commercials are sent to
customers
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 automatically even when they do not want to take them.
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, irregular time of
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 makes
people
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 uncomfortable and annoyed because it pushes important messages down
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 as a business email or urgent contact.
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, an increased number of
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 will neglect or unsubscribe
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company’s
advertisement
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. In conclusion, it is comparatively convenient to attract numerous
people
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 because of its accessibility and nowadays, they can buy products by clicking a button. If they do not want to take it, they can easily regard it as spam messages or cancel a subscription.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuading
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • consumers
  • psychology
  • behavioral science
  • emotional appeals
  • brand association
  • loyalty
  • over-saturation
  • ad-blockers
  • desensitized
  • impact
  • digital media
  • personal recommendations
  • peer recommendations
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