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Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While
 there is an opinion that advertising is still creative and attractive enough to persuade
people
 to buy their products, others believe that
advertisements
 are saturated, so
people
 no longer pay attention to them. Personally, I agree to side with the former. On the one hand, it is the cyber era these days,
advertisements
 can be seen everywhere, anytime and it is annoying for many
people
. Ads appeared before or even during the video that an individual watched on Youtube or they can be even found on any website that
people
 visited. Some of them hide the contents on the websites and cause disturbed. So many
people
 are done with it and ignore the attendance of
advertisements
.
On the other hand
,
advertisements
 are still effective.
For example
, Google, Meta and Tiktok develop the algorithm to know more about which products that consumers are interested in. These companies
base
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 on the post that an individual reacts to or the search history, so that they can show the most suitable ads for each person.
Thus
, advertising still plays a significant role introduce products and persuade
people
 to shop. In conclusion,
although
 the widespread of
advertisements
 makes it becomes unattractive and annoying, it still manages to capture
people
's needs and to buy with willingness. In my opinion, I believe that advertising has its positive and negative effects. So, I am standing on the fence as it does fulfil some of my desire, but sometimes it annoys me, especially when it appears in my mailbox.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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