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The best way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Incessant
traffic
 jams and other
traffic
-related problems have heightened public interest in the topic of how to curb
traffic
 volume.
Although
 some believe that reducing the need for daily commuting is the most effective way to do
this
, I believe that
this
 measure would be unworkable and there are more acceptable methods.
Firstly
, reducing the need for residents to travel for work, study or shopping purposes is impractical. No matter how effectively modern technologies allow us to work, study, or carry out online transactions, most of us still prefer face-to-face interactions, perpetuating the need to travel.
This
 can be seen in the way business
people
 choose to meet up halfway at a café to discuss a deal, how students prefer discussing an idea or a lesson at their school campus, and how we enjoy going to shopping malls. With our society still putting a significant amount of importance on real-life day-to-day conversations and interactions, the proposed scheme would not work. Facilitating public transport appears to be a superior alternative solution. Since means of public transport that are not road-based,
such
 as sky trains or subways, are largely underdeveloped in most cities, developing these can help
people
 commute without causing congestion.
For example
, by investing significantly in building elevated and underground railways, Japan has managed to reduce
traffic
 volume considerably, easing congestion on roads. Granted, using these means of transport could be expensive, but government subsidies would lower the prices of tickets, which will incentivize
people
 to abandon their personal vehicles and
subsequently
 reduce pressure on roads. In conclusion, it is futile trying to get
people
 to stay at home more for the sake of
traffic
 and investing in public transit systems would be a better remedy when it comes to alleviating
traffic
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commuting patterns
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • E-learning platforms
  • E-commerce
  • Urban planning
  • Public transportation
  • Infrastructure development
  • Green spaces
  • Pedestrianization
  • Carbon footprint
  • Sustainable living
  • Carpooling
  • Cycle lanes
  • Mixed-use development
  • Teleconference
  • Urban sprawl
  • Zoning regulations
  • Traffic congestion
  • City logistics
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