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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people aroundthe world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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With the advancement of science and technology, agriculture has gone through a lot of improvements.
However
, a significant amount of people around the
world
 are still struggling to cope with hunger. The following essay will discuss the reasons for
this
issue
 and try to find out a solution.
Although
 the purpose of the development of agriculture was to feed the huge population around the
world
, several problems have just made that goal shattered. The primary reason for
this
 problem is there is no assurance of proper distribution of
food
.
For example
, if
food
 grows somewhere in the
world
 not everyone can
access
 it because of the boundaries or corruption.
Moreover
, in some underdeveloped countries, not everyone can have equal
access
 to
food
 because of its high price of it.
Therefore
, especially people belonging to those countries cannot
access
food
. One of the plausible solutions to
food
 crises could be ensuring the proper distribution of
food
. The huge amount of
food
 growing around the
world
 should be properly distributed among the population regardless of their financial condition, class and culture. Interference between the government and other international organizations is required regarding
this
issue
.
Additionally
, the preservation of
food
 needs to be ensured because they are raw materials so, to feed people for a large amount of time preservation is needed.
Furthermore
, the excessive price of
food
 should be reduced so that not only the rich but
also
 the poor can have the same
access
.
To conclude
, hunger is a worldwide problem and to fight
this
 global
issue
 every country should work hand in hand. Finding out the causes behind it and implementing effective measures based on that causes could help to solve
this
issue
.
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